Quick write photo
This picture was taken in Auckland and won Auckland photo competition.
We used this photo because it could bring a lot of ideas to our writing.
We used complex sentence's , opener sentence's , place a comma in the write place and use short sharp sentences. I made mine a sad story because he brakes two ribs and a dislocates a shoulder. We had to feel like we were the character I brainstormed my feelings , thoughts and monologue .
I’m walking across the old rustic wharf with my friends , I feel there eyes burning on my back
as I climb on the fence. I take of my shoes and see the bottom of the water . I had a beautiful city as a backdrop the sky tower nearly reaching the sky and going through the clouds. I realized when I was on that fence that this is high !!
I hesitate, mumble then jump up. Go down as fast as a rocket , I get shocked.
That was the moment that I swam up from the bottom of the water and felt the coldness. As I put my head up from the water, I saw the dark ,sad sky.
I climb the ladder up to the wharf ,my ribs are hurting real bad. Next thing I know I’m in the car going to the emergency centre. I see people that look a lot worse than myself some with cuts down there legs and black eyes.
I see my friends talking to the doctor and saying that we were just playing truth or dare and we dared him to jump of the wharf.
Well whatever you were doing it was going to have consequences to it . Anyway your friend is good to go he’s got two broken ribs and a dislocated shoulder .
A few minutes later.`Okay let's go home and get you to rest.